I ran as fast as I could I never wanted to see this
place again, or that guy he was the one, the one that killed my father in front
of me. He was laughing when the knife cut across father’s throat. That fateful
day, that man, the one that made me an orphan. I ran away with my sister after
the remembering of that fateful day. My sister was a tall and very pretty girl
with long black hair; she only just turned ten whilst I was fifteen. We ran to
a cottage all the while trying to forget.
I like the way you have developed some plot, many responses to this prompt are light on plot.
ReplyDelete"I ran away with my sister after the remembering of that fateful day." Take away 'the' and 'of' from remembering, and it will read better.
Well done.