Monday, November 4, 2013

The animal catastrophe!, Kaelyn


The animal catastrophe!

Shaking with terror, it screamed ferociously as it swung towards me, this was the worst time EVER to come to the zoo. Its midnight at brooklyns zoo and the animals have gone completely MAD!

I have come to feed the animals and somehow they’re acting really strange. Maybe the zoo keepers feed them new food?

Anyway…………this is what those weird animals are up to:

1)   The giraffes are shaking like rattle snakes!

2)   The pigs are walking like the meerkats!

3)   The flamingos are spinning on their heads!

And 4) Is the terrifying APE! And I told you that he swung towards me. When I approached his cage he clenched to the metal and …………it stared at me behind the bars………he was strangely becoming calm and everything had stopped.     

4 comments:

  1. Very discriptive Kaelyn well done! also I like how you put 1 2 3 of what the animals were doing once again well done!
    Bonnie

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  2. Wow Kaelyn, what a great story! You had my attention from the very start....such a good beginning to the story, well done.
    Tracy

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  3. wow!! Kaelyn what a captivating story, an awesome use of descriptive words and similies, keep up your great writing!!
    Mum, Dad and Kalissa xxx

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