Tuesday, October 15, 2013

100wc ,Oscar,The Last Blood


 …Slowly the sky got darker… black clouds swarmed over the vast emptyness of the single solitary peak. The beast had torn up a clear path through the slate and stone. He was looking for the king who had been kidnapped last night. He was following a trail of black blood the king had obviously fought back but can’t have succeded for later on red blood covered the black stone all hope was lost it was over.

4 comments:

  1. wow that is a very powerful piece of writing

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  2. well done oscar!! I love your compelling and thrilling descriptions. They really put a powerful and detailed image in my mind. I'm impressed by your vast range of dazzling vocabulary and you are an overall talented writer. by William.

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  3. Oscar, do you, in your head and your heart, have definitive proof that the King is indeed dead? I feel that you might climb another peak and see him sheltering below in a state of shock and injury.
    You must feel a wonderful sense of approval from William's comment.
    Mrs C

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  4. I like how you ended the story it was quite sudden and unexpected.

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