Wednesday, October 30, 2013

the storm corban


 

The ground trembled as the lightning struck the earth, setting the tree it split in half, ablaze. The glass shattered to pieces as the wind pressed against it, dirt stirred in the wind, more thunder boomed overhead, my face drained of colour as I meet the heavy rain. The violent storm was looming over the city, it’s inky blackness consumed me as if it was a human.

 

The wind pulled down a house like nothing was there , the lake overwhelmed the sea wall , sprinting away from the gushing water I knew it wouldn’t be long until I was swept away    

2 comments:

  1. Hi Corban.

    I really enjoyed this 100wc. The way you have brought this storm to life is truly fantastic - your face draining of colour, the inky blackness consuming you - I loved it!

    Just remember to check before submitting - the last sentence is a little long.

    Wonderful writing,

    Mr Connor
    Team 100wc

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  2. Hi corban
    I really LIKE your 100wc because you use lots of long words. I liked the part when you said it's inky blackness cosumed you.

    From Katherine

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